2023新托福考試寫作題型範例

Writing Practice Set 2: (Academic Discussion) – Instructions, Question, and Discussion

Your professor is teaching a class on political science. Write a post responding to the professor’s question.

In your response you should:

• express and support your opinion
• make a contribution to the discussion

An effective response will contain at least 100 words. You will have 10 minutes to write it.

Writing Practice Set 2: (Academic Discussion) – Instructions, Question, and Discussion

Your professor is teaching a class on political science. Write a post responding to the professor’s question.

In your response you should:

• express and support your opinion
• make a contribution to the discussion

An effective response will contain at least 100 words. You will have 10 minutes to write it.

Sample Responses (Score 5, 171 words)

In the past 200 years, tons of scientific discoveries or technological inventions have been shown to the world. If I had to choose one in particular it will probably be vaccine or antibiotics. With Pasteur’s work and discoveries, the world changed in a way people couldn’t imagine. So many people were dying really young because at that time life’s conditions were not as good as the one we have now. With vaccine, we could now irradicate diseases that were killing millions of people, we learn so much about the immune system and ways our body was reacting to pathogens and the answers he could produce to defend us against it. Medicine evolved so much and keeps evolving every day because scientists are curious understand how our body is working and how he is able to communicate with our environment. People aged 40 are now not that old and still have a really long life to live and enjoy when 2 centuries ago it was synonymous of 80% chance of dying.

Score explanation

This is a fully successful response. The writer chooses vaccines/antibiotics as the most important invention of the past 200 years. The author then provides a description, for contrast, of what life was like before Pasteur’s work (people dying young) and after the vaccine was created (millions of lives saved, more understanding of the immune system). The writer continues on to point out that medicine continues to evolve because of Pasteur’s work and how human lifespans have been extended. Overall, the response provides well-elaborated explanations and details to support the main opinion and provides a relevant contribution to the discussion.
While there are almost no errors in grammar and word choice, there a few minor ones that have little impact on meaning (such as “life’s conditions were not as good as the one we have” rather than “were not as good as they are now,” and “how our body is working and how he is able to communicate” rather than “how it is able to communicate”). However, these errors are fairly minor and such errors might be expected when writing under timed conditions. The writer is able to use some complex sentences and relatively precise vocabulary, which is expected in a 5-level response.